Week 14 : Peer Review

PEER EVALUATION : 이지민

According to the rubric above, what grade would you give this essay? Why?
2점. classical argument 부분 중 confirmation part가 아예 없어서.
How does this essay need to improve to get a better grade?
우선 classical argument 형식에 맞추어서 글을 써야할 듯.

Thesis

What is the thesis?
Vaccines are effective to prevent diseases.
Is the thesis clear and debatable?
명확하지만 찬성하는 의견이 너무나 당연하게 여겨지기 때문에
debatable하지는 않은 듯.

If you (The reviewer) wrote this essay, how would you have written the thesis?
vaccines are the most effective method to prevent diseases.

Any other thoughts?
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Classical Argument
Can you easily identify the 5 parts of the classical argument? If no, what parts are missing?Does the introduction catch your attention? Does it comfortably lead to the thesis?
No. confirmation 부분이 없음.

Does the narration give all the necessary background information to understand the topic?
네

Does the confirmation adequately support the thesis?
confirmation 없음.
Does the refutation and concession address a realistic counterpoint? Does it adequately dispute the counterpoint, or respond in a reasonable manner?
부작용에 대한 직접적인 반박이 아니라서 덜 설득적인 듯.

Does the conclusion summarize the article and address the larger significance of the thesis?
네

What suggestions do you have for improving the classical argument structure?
.

Persuasion

When you started reading the essay, did you agree or disagree with the thesis?
agree

When you finished the essay, did you agree or disagree with the thesis?
 agree

If your mind changed, why? What parts of the essay were persuasive?
.

Research
Is the author using research effectively?
research가 부족한 것 같음.

Is the research from appropriate sources?
source 표시 없음.

Are the sources obvious?
source 표시 없음

Are the pieces of evidence relevant to the thesis or essay?
네
Are there any parts of the essay that need evidence to support the claims?
백신의 안정성에 대한 실험 결과 등을 confirmation 부분에서 제시해주면 더욱
설득력이 생길 것 같음.