Week 14 : Peer Review

PEER EVALUATION : 이진우

According to the rubric above, what grade would you give this essay? Why?
4점. persuasive essay의 기본적 구조에 맞게 글을 잘 썼고 thesis도 명확.
다만 아직 biobliography 작성이나 다듬어지지 않은 문장이 있는 것 같아서 1점을 깎았습니다.
How does this essay need to improve to get a better grade?
구조나 논리적인 면에서는 충분한 것 같으나 resource 표시를 안해서 그런지 confirmation 부분에 자료가 조금 부족하게 느껴짐.

Thesis

What is the thesis?
psychologists can't understand the human mind correctly only with one viewpoint – behavior
Is the thesis clear and debatable?
네
If you (The reviewer) wrote this essay, how would you have written the thesis?
똑같이

Any other thoughts?
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Classical Argument
Can you easily identify the 5 parts of the classical argument? If no, what parts are missing?Does the introduction catch your attention? Does it comfortably lead to the thesis?
네. introduction부분이 좀 specific해서 오히려 흥미도는 조금 떨어질 것 같음.
Does the narration give all the necessary background information to understand the topic?
네
Does the confirmation adequately support the thesis?
네
Does the refutation and concession address a realistic counterpoint? Does it adequately dispute the counterpoint, or respond in a reasonable manner?
네
Does the conclusion summarize the article and address the larger significance of the thesis?
네
What suggestions do you have for improving the classical argument structure?
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Persuasion

When you started reading the essay, did you agree or disagree with the thesis?
agree
When you finished the essay, did you agree or disagree with the thesis?
agree
If your mind changed, why? What parts of the essay were persuasive?
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Research
Is the author using research effectively?
네
Is the research from appropriate sources?
중간 중간에 source표시가 없는 것이 아쉬움.
Are the sources obvious?
밑에 적혀있는 source표시도 명확하지 않음.
Are the pieces of evidence relevant to the thesis or essay?
네
Are there any parts of the essay that need evidence to support the claims?
없음.